So I don't talk about you anymore
And they say things will be better than before
So I live another day , hoping they are right
But now , I lie awake , in this cold November night
I think about you and I believe
that when it's time for me to leave
And the sounds of life are defeated by a silent grace
I , my friend , will want to see your face
You trusted me without a why
And I said I am your shade when the sun is high
You just smiled and did not doubt
My false promises kept the reality out
But when the wolves arrived , you saw me depart
And now , the shards of those promises bleed my heart
and When the lady called life loosens her embrace
I , my friend , will want to see your face
Do you hate me now , I do not know
Do you regret knowing a man so shallow
Does it disgust you to remember my voice
Will you live it again , if given a choice
I think you wont , And I see the reason
But I still wish , though guilty of treason
And when the glow of a setting sun fills the space
I , my friend , will want to see your face
You dont let go of your dreams
For a whisper of love can drown all the screams
I know that to talk of love , I have no right
But sometimes you see something only when it is out of sight
So wherever you are , give love another chance
Let it fill your heart , do it's divine dance
As for me ..when the angels of death carry me to a darker place
I , my friend , will want to see your face
* Added Later , after seven people mailed me saying Suicide is not a great thing to attempt *
Whoa ! Chill Yaaro . There was a bunch of really verbal Punjabi dogs right outside my window at 4.30 in the morning , and since they wont let me sleep , decided to see if I can rhyme words . So chill . It takes something as grave as back to back screenings of Karz and Phoonk to depress me . Dissociations with the female variety of Homo Sapiens aint that bad for me . And all the angry guys commenting here , You are always fun to have around .
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wow!! so now u hv chosen poetry...
well written abhinav!!
who else thn me can understand it means,watever u've written..
loved this the most!!
love
wow! nice one! but quite a shocker considering your other blogs...whatever it is, i wish sun never goes down on you! Wishing you very best in everything!
Haila....aaj to main third aa gayi....achievement considering the race for posting comments by your chahne waale...btw...when did you start poetry, dear friend? lagta hai hamari company ka asar hai...hehehe. I am sure acchi hi likhi hogi..I will comment after reading it...socha pahle comment karke bronze medal le loon.
Wow Abhi...aur kya kahu...amazing poem and great depth in words. I think I am not capable of saying or commenting more than that. And you say so many times that there is no sense in your thinking?...Very innocent poem...and trust me, sun will never go down on you..you will rise and soar with every dawn and sunrise. Mark my words. We all won't ever let you get tired in this pace.
American Idol
.... m lil worried now
It seemed ages since u last wrote...
And i was not expecting this.... But an amazing composition... You are good man!
Waiting for ur blog now...
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One of the best I have come across! Lovely!
Beautiful!
This is the only word that comes to mind after reading your poem. Really loved it, but seems as if you are going through a turbulent phase in your life. I just hope that this phase gets over soon. Wishing you all the luck and peace of mind :)
Beautiful.
have got used to ur style of humour writing...but its good to write on things affecting one's life the most ...the medium of poetry is the best reflection of one's feeling ... way to go Abhi!!
So, thats the reason you didn't post for so long?
Extremely touching!
is all that I can say...
dimag visphotik...
glad to have ur blog updated...
and yeah all the best :)
Wow!
lovely
but, u know what, honestly,
i miss ur earlier posts
the way u wrote.... so lively, so funny
some how, this is not the real u
or......... was that not the real u?
hi abhi...
a really touching peom.... but this one does not suites u, a guy well known as funny guy...
hope all is well with you....
impressed at your versatality as a writer :) maybe you shd quit ur day job and do a 'one night in a call centre'
awesome:)
loved it:)
welcome back to d blogging world:)
when u screw up some one else's life and dont have the guts, you end up writing such poetry...
tell all the women who like ur poetry what a pussy you actually are
nice poem !
Its a lovely poem but I dun want to you to write such poems. i hope u are back to your real spunky self real soon. All the very best!
Sahi hain. Seems like a lost love to me. But I dont know you much, so maybe I'm wrong. But simple enough for a good read.
tu theek hai??
Mixed feelings your latest entry evoked, is all I can say. On one hand am too too glad to finally read something written by you after so damn long, and on the other, am unhappy.. cuz you seem to be so unhappy. I wish I'd known you personally, maybe then I'd have known what's weighing you down so much and maybe I'd have said somthing more comforting. Nonetheless, I wish you all the best and all the happiness. Cheer up, bud :)
Please write more often, it's dreadful waiting for your posts..
Open your eyes to bright and new...
Everything is fresh like morning dew...
The world was never like this, it will never be...
Make the most of today and let the past flee...
I've been reading your blog since a long time and I really love it!!
Your poem is just AWESOME. Completely different from what you've written but as intresting!!
Keep Blogging!
hey lovely composition Abhi!! when did you start with poetry!? The poem's beautiful...but you don't sound good...take care...
when the heart bleeds truly, the words are no doubt wonderful.. amazingly nice!
wrds r great... poem is too good :)
Beautiful.. Got to see your serious side...
That tugged the heart strings !
Good one !
Hi Abhinav Ji
you are quite used to praises and criticism so I am not going to do that... Just a small request..
Please appear more.. Even a single blog saying "Hi" from you on this site will bring a big smile...!
Reply seriously awaited..!
~Abhinav~
Hey abhi,
m going thru a turbulent rather sad time as well, going away from ur loved ones was, is and will never be easy..Cud really relate to the poem..specially the Heart bleeding bit..something tht i really needed..Thanks a lot..
awesome!
heart on paper.. thats wht i can gauge this to be...
real good work...
Unbelievable! Absolutely lovely. Comes at a tim when I echo your sentiments, so its a lil uncanny, but it was beautiful.
When the sun goes down,
It rises again, with a new day
& a new chance..!
"Will you live it again , if given a choice
I think you wont , And I see the reason
But I still wish , though guilty of treason
And when the glow of a setting sun fills the space
I , my friend , will want to see your face"
If you wish it so much, make a move u silly, dont sit down writting poetry. It is best to ask her now than to live an unfulfilled dream and alwayz hope. And something says she really cared about u so why not just give it another chance. Trust me it's best to do now than to reminsce in memories. It's never too late, if u truly believe it.
Dude!! I loved this poem but I sure hope you are ok!! Sab theek ho jayega!! This too shall pass!! Dont worry!!
Cheers :)
Kabhi likhna bandh math karna!! :)
o tere ki !!!!!!!!!!
kahaani ... i mean blog main twist !!
all the girls here who say "ooh" and "aah" and "lovely poem" and all that bull shit, dont realise that this is the outcome of a spineless man. A man who is "guilty of treason" and is scavenging for pity and "awww dont be saaddd" statements from random people to soothe his ego.
beautiful.... loved it!!
@Shekhar/Shrek--All the girls who are saying "ooh" and "aah" on this poem have a mind of their own. I understand it is hard to undo what one has done in the past.But how many have that courage and guts to speak up truth and admit in a public place that they have done wrong to someone.He is just letting his heart out here, whether it is a wrong deed or right. Why can't we accept that to err is human and they are bound to commit mistakes. This poem is not an outcome of a spineless man rather a genuine man who realizes whatever he does.
@Abhi--Sorry Abhi for replying aggressively on your blog. I am glad that you speak your mind. Just don't let anything affect you negatively...Remember,there is a dawn after every night and sun comes up again.
"All this just doesn't define you, you be happy right now!"
This is what you had told me once, when i shared my career related tensions with you. Your words really had an effect on me. And today,i can only say that You are good Abhinav! Don't feel so negative about yourself. Please..
waise the poem is good yaar.. :)
Your well-wisher
Madhavi :)
It certainly sounds as though you regret hurting her the way you did. If you are genuine and sincere then perhaps the universe will conspire to bring her back to you. And even if the universe doesnt bring her back into your life, I wholeheartedly believe that things happen for a reason. And perhaps she was meant to leave so that you would recognize love's true worth.
Cheer up, though. :)
i used to mull that i cud replace chetan bhagat by abhinav jain but now after sinking my self in the above ditty i guess i will choose abhinav jain over Emily Bronte! gender is not question when it comes to love n feelings.beautiful man!! main shayar toh nahi magar ai abhi jab se read kiya ye poem shayari a agayi.
Reality is kinda like that rock hard ground...when things sink, it hits.
Good stuff man. :)
hey,
came across your blog and the huge fan following...am a feature writer and was looking for Chandigarh people,who are using the medium of Internet and gaining something out of it...(though, i believe u r new 2 dis city)
incase you happen to have to say something on dat...do get back...via a post...
ouffff...finally a post..welcome back:)
ehsaan
with so much discussion on your spine, i guess you should see a bone-doctor, i know there is some word for it but , right now i just don't recall.
i guess it is ...i again forget the word, something relating to having a cleansing effect or things coming out..to let the discussion on your spine remain, and not delete them.
Any case ...ease up.
@take a hike: I think you are referring to CATHARSIS, that's what this poem seems to be about.
Blog updated and url changed to this.
Will come back later to read and comment.
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Commented later: }:-)
welcome back!
probly ur first serious i mean very serious and senti post but loved it every word of it... kee writing :)
Hey Guys,
Just came across CNN's India Means Business week website, www.cnn.com/india. it has some very interesting and amazing stories on India and its business culture. This is a part of CNN's special programming on India's business and economy starting from Nov 24. Apparently, we can also put in our comments or post videos on their www.cnn.com/ireport/ Definitely worth a try!
Memerising!....the other side of abhinav...ur blog is the best out of all the blogs i have read...
oops ............. so abhi unckle trying to sound poetic and that too serious one gud ryhmes and gud job........don (dawn) ka kamal hai............
nice one!!...you seem to be a genuine person as only then can you write such realizations in public...but such realizations are far more effective if they are expressed to the concerned person directly...it cld let you get rid of ur guilt (assuming its not all imagination :) )
I dono if i can say nice.. i mean its really touchy..
kavivar..hatprapbh hon main is kavita ko padhkar...
eng main kehte hai na.."terrific start"..kuch aisa hi kar dia hai apne..
Cheers!!
I had warned you in ladkiyon ke chakkar main mat aana....they dont have kuch kaam kaaj except to mess around with civilized men like u....
abhi?
Hei, so you are a poet also!!!!
well this one was really heart-touchig.
but one thing i would like to say, never break anyone's heart. and its easy to win someone's trust but very hard to commit for it.
Nice poem. Your creative writing rocks ! :-)
You are a poet,
And We don't even know it .. :)
I can understand, Dekh le yaar augar ho sakta ho to kar le fir se try .. augar nahe hota to kat le ..
Kuchh kante hamesha chubte rahe to bhi achcha rahta hai .. ahsaas to hota hai ..
sonch sonch ke zindagi ki &@@^# mat maar :)..
Try to catch the next bus ;)
Have u seen Bachena Ae Haseeno( Ranbeer aur Deepika aur na jaane kitni ladkiya ) ... If u have seen this movie you'll know wat to do my friend. Maufi manglo bete .. !! :)
Hey...Loved the sudden jhatka in the end...im a first time visitor to your blog...are your posts always sardonic?Interesting,though!
No offense! :)
Where is that funny crazy Abhi gone? Sigh!!! Pls come back..this doesn't suit you :). Don't change pls...
Hello Abhinav,
I had come across your blog accidentally about a year ago.It was funny.I forgot all about it and just thought about it today as i was free.But i had forgotten your blog url.I remembered it was something like lifeformyself.I googled few combinations,still no luck.I then vaguely remembered you spoke about some frnd called sunshine.I googled sunshine and it led me to here.Amazing how,small things can really matter.
first time to post the comment..
have been reading posts for sometime though...
but really awesome one...
loved it!!
Very well written :-)I loved it...
gud way of putting thoughts in words!!
hope its followed by some corrective action...
Hi Abhi...
I have been reading ur blogs since few months..n i just love the way u express feelings..d way u play around wid words..its awesome!!..just amazingly done..keep writing.
best wishes.
Hi Abhi...
I have been reading ur blogs since few months..n i just love the way u express feelings..d way u play around wid words..its awesome!!..just amazingly done..keep writing.
best wishes.
Wow..u wrote this cos u weren't getting any sleep? Gave me the heebie-jeebies. Wonder what you would write if you actually put your mind to it...
Didn't know you could write such lovely poetry... wonder who it is for...
Didn't know you could write such lovely poetry... wonder who it is for...
Awesome Poem Sir :)
I copied it n send to my frnd!! I hope u dont mind!!! :)...we are apart from long n she had seen a really bad time inbetween!!! :(
anywz...gud to see u back!!hope ur having a gud time...ur still at chandigarh or back to gurgaun???
ummmm.... :) beautiful...
at times due to certain circumstances things don't turn out right... despair not...
and as you have said it so right...
"wherever you are, give love another chance
Let it fill your heart, do it's divine dance"
:)
beautiful, thori filmy dramatic hai... but good :)
It looks like you have hurt someone with your lies.The least you can do is atleast acknowledge it to that person.It will lessen their pain.Instead of writing poetry for other's consumption about how you betrayed a person's faith in you,like a pervert.
Nerd...
Very moving. I can relate to it a lot. For a dog induced insomnia composition, its quite something..
visiting ur blog for 1st time... nice substances to visit more n more... n ur poem dint look like just a rhyme... depth is dere in every sentence...!!!
What does one do abt you ? cant just stop reading your posts :(
Hi,
Must be some pressure with so many people foisting their opinions and desires on you.. kamar dukh jaati hogi :-)
I have been reading and recommending your blog for 2 yrs, but commenting for the first time.
Just wanted to say that some time back I was going through a very very tough phase in life. My world was in shambles, everything was out of control. In those times, your blog made me smile and laugh.
I Thank You.
It brought tears to my eyes...thats all I can say
You deserve to be roasted alive - if you really made false promises to someone who believed in you.. Kidding ! Bark back at the dogs and go to sleep.
The sun goes down on you ?
Am I the only one who finds that *ahem* naughty ?!! :p
Zzzzz write something silly!! everything after all is a choice why have u abandoned this place, what for . You cant just sit down and do that. Grr or I will have to knock you off your silly brains. Now go ahead, think of something and write and I am sure you might have abundant in your pocket to talk about.
Waiting for nother funny Munnu style :P Post!
Are kuch likh vi daalo ab...itna bhav mat khao..
Long time, no blog dude !!
comon !! high time!
its been soooooooooooo long ! write something please..
Very well written
Most 'funny' guys are no so funny inside.
Amen.
hey Abhi, your poem led me to my beloved.....thanx!!! thanks a million!!!
Lo ji 100th comment on the last of the year 2008.
Ab to write a new post!!!
A fan of your posts and a yet-to-become-a-blogger:-))
Monika
Happy New Year Abhi!
May you get all that you wish for :)
hmmm rite smething silly!!
Dude, where have u lost ? I knw the economic crisis n all that stuff, but still...
Hey... Been a long time. Wher r u
whoa! 104 comments and everyone has an opinion!
Liked it much. Sadly, can relate to it too.
is this inspired by John elton /George Micheal's Don't let the sun go down on me ... well written..loved it
all rite ... i hav no idea whether ull actually get to read this comment under all the 106 ones.. but i really wanted to write.
stumbled upon ur blog thru a chain of random blog crawl the other day. went to the earliest posts. bcuz of time contraints i hav reached about halfway i guess... till 2006 i guess.
i m in 8th sem comps, n jus got my CAT results. they suck. neway, reading about ur placements experience n some other related stuff from back 2004. made me feel like it was me doing the talking. it hit a place too close to home i must say.
neway i hav no clue whts there in the rest of ur blog, infact i havent even read the post i m supposed to be commenting on, but from the looks of it, it sounds great. :)
will be visiting more often, to see there are more similarities in our educational lives... lolz. bbye great work.
dude seriously...!get back to writing some good stuff man...
Sir Abhinav Jain!!!
Come back!! Writing God!! FiRST THERE IS GOD THEN SIR ABHINAV JAIN AT WRITING!!!
yaar Abhinav,
Dont Mind,
Zinda ho???
M someone who sevral times comes to ur blog in a month, to see if there is something new. Let me admit i have never commented in past(hope u remember ur khao-piyo-khisko , M a member of tht club ). This time ur making me feel k jab tak mai comment ni karunga tum nhi likhogey. So socha try kar leta hoon.
arrey mai yeh kabhi nhi kehta k, write frequently(coz i feel ur better wen ur at ur own) or u r good kind of stuff, but apni khoj kahabar toh do?
Just another reader.
what is this Abhi ! :( write something yaar... ab bohot ho gaya ! :( :(
humne socha ki chalo yaaad aaye to yaad hi karlen aapko!
Phir laga ki kahin bhoool na gaye ho humen aap toh,
phir socha ki bhool bhi gaye ho to kya,
ek blog comment ki der hai, sab yaad aa jayega aapko!
I hope you are doing well, really loved this post of yours!
Akanksha
Well..
the rhyming was perfect
which definately had an effect
now wondering whether u have a defect!! :)
Punjabi Dogs?? Now u are bringing discrimination in animals too :(
kuttu ko toh baksh do...
Nice one Abhinav...and nice clarification too (though it is a little hard to believe its just the dogs screaming !)
and ya..Happy New Year :)
u can do more than just rhyme abhinav, awesome shot at poetry :)
PS: karzzz and phoonk, back to back?? :O why??
Amazing!
theres so much of depth behind the humor n wit...
Amazing...!!!
sumit:)
dont go on the name displayed >>
I loved ur poem till .... i read ur later comment on that poe...dissociations with female homosapiens isnt that bad for me ..huhh.
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